Oh lord. Just read chapter 2. Realized that you included the League of Legends. T_T
Kudos to you for your writing skill, I hear many praises to your fight scenes, but I dislike the "Kill and bring back" bit. With Riv and Dar
Yes- I am aware that these are League of Legends Fan Fictions, but I hate it when people make too many references to the game itself, along with gameplay, abilities, etc.
I believe that I said this some where else: It is ok to incorporate some parts of it, but making this story too much like a game kills the story. What is the point of battle and war if people are just brought back like in summoners rift? Each of the lores do indeed have a connection to the league- in the end. This is a way for Riot to incorporate a storyline into their game. Gives people a feel when they play their champions. In my opinion (which you can scrap or take advice from) We make smaller references. We can say the League but not make them actually participate in game matches.
Other references are like the ones in my fic. The three shields around Garen do represent "courage" the ability, but I don't simply say: Garen activated courage. (taken from a fanfic that I personally think is rubbish)
We can use the names of Champion abilities if it fits. Taken from my "The Quest for Doran's Ring" it says:
Katarina disappeared and reappeared behind Shen. She brought her blade to Shen's throat.
"I call it flashstep." She crowed into his ear. "You won't catch me with that speed."
Shen's eyes widened in realization.
"It's not called flashstep" He said underneath his breath. "It's called-"
Shen disappeared. Suddenly the other two ninja disappeared as well. Katarina found herself surrounded with blades at her throat and a chain tied around her arms and torso.
(BLEACH REFERNCE OMG LOL)
See what I did? Shunpo can be used since it is an actual name that makes sense. However, in TMoDB when she uses "sinister steel", I describe how it is used. Same goes with Garen's Courage, Demacian Justice, -and soon- Decisive strike.
Food for the thought.