Hey Miao, just wanted to drop by and tell you how amazing this was so far. Read it last night, it's really good. I'm sure you may have seen me say how I don't like stories involving the League itself, but you've managed to execute this excellently. I love the story between Yi and Ahri. (I could tell from the moment that you described Rixa, she looked like her.)
You are by far the best writer on this forum, rivaling only me. (Just kidding. Obviously I'm better ) It only irks me a bit that you put so many names of manuvers into it. I mean, saying things like ALPHA STRIKE is all fine and dandy, but I wish you were more descriptive with other moves, making them like Pantheon's Heart Seeker Strike. Although you didn't say he used that move, your descriptions instantly reminded me of it.
Congratulations, you have increased my respect of Master Yi (seeing him in game always pisses me off. Mostly AD/DPS Yi's.) Your description of Xerath is excellent as well. I mean, he is the ultimate magician. You would think he gets more recognition. (I was planning on putting Xerath in my fic. Now after reading yours, can I include that bit about: Enhancers, the Wu, and the others I forgot?)
Why don't you like Garen? (Can you tell me which one he dies in?)
P.s. As I was reading, I saw a few mistakes. Unfortunately I've forgotten where they are, but I've taken screenshots and I'll tell you in my next post.