This story is much more believable and more fitting for the character.

Ah, now this is much better. I still have a few technical qualms (Mostly the comma usage lending itself to a few splices) but the overall quality of this bio is much better than the last revision. Katarina's character is much clearer here, and you've done some seriously good work clarifying her mission and making it seem more like something she would do.

I have to say what impresses me most, though, is your ability to take the community's concerns into account and make edits based off the feedback. So, bravo on that front. It's always good to see game companies really communicating with their fans about the lore of their world.

+1 and have a good day, you've earned it.

You were SO CLOSE, Riot. SO CLOSE....


....BUT YOU JUST HAD TO THROW THAT "PASSION" IN THERE, RIGHT AT THE END! WHY?!

I'm glad you got constructive criticism out of the mess that got posted :P There was some good stuff in there, but also "waaaaaaaaa kats lore got changed"

I still don't quite understand why when she killed the general she didn't just move on to kill the other guy. Is it failure just so you can be like

"well we needed something"

It just seems odd and uneccassary.

Although I do like the part where it at least seems she slaughters an entire Demacian unit.

I will be honest. I still think the original is better. But this one is leaps and bounds over the previous remake. So good job.