For my lit class, I had to write a poem that serves as an allusion to one of the books we have read so far in the year. I chose to write about Crime and Punishment, so if you haven't read the book, you may not understand the meaning behind this poem. Still, I like to think I'm fairly good with poetry, and I think I did an okay job:


I walk across the frigid lane
A guilty spirit once again
Tormented by the haunting pain
Of meeting women with their end.

I wonder what I had to gain--
Or was it solely to defend
My heart's own desperate refrain
That I am one who may transcend

The barriers of human blame,
Of order, law and bitter shame
In man's eternal quest to tame
The sorrow in this horrid game?

Perhaps. But now, I know I'm wrong
For now I hear a mournful song
That guides me where I now belong
And tells me only "come along".


So... yeah. Thoughts?

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Your rhyming really overpowered the message and felt forced.

Second stanza is your best IMO, but it could flow better.

Try less Dr. Seuss and more concrete imagery.

Have not read C&P.

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