I was only slightly disappointed with Riven's confrontation with Irelia, but perhaps that's just because I believe Riven had put that part of the past far behind her, and locked it down. Or perhaps I kind'a wanted to see Riven get pummeled a bit before finally giving in, weak, confused and shattered emotionally and Irelia just pats her head and comforts her. I don't know, but it just seemed a bit lacking.
I realize that when playing Riven, she actually seems rather confident and sturdy, and not the sort of past-dwelling emotional character I'm writing her as.
The way I'm writing my story is to mold her from what I've described her as so far into the character you see within the game, with definitive ideals and goals ("Violence to end violence").
So, in the end, it's not just a cute pairing between Lux and Riven. It's Riven's journey towards her own future, and her true path.
I must agree with you though. That scene does need a bit more to it (it actually had even less before I went back and did my latest edit). That's one of the strengths and weaknesses of writing individual chapters. I can get feedback for it, and change it later, but I can't make it flow with the rest of the story until it's all done. So I'll be going back and doing some final editing once I finish the last chapter. It wouldn't feel right until it all worked together.
Thanks for the critique and compliments!
Yay! New chapter...I liked it...but I may have to drop out of reading it eventually, you know...I get uncomfortable around some of this sort of stuff...
That said... Just what are you uncomfortable with again?