Honestly, I didn't really feel it. *shrug* I know it was a short piece, but I'm a strong believer that a characters flaws make the character work. All I got from this piece is how much of a bad ass the new guy is.

If you want to make a bunch of pieces about how bad ass everyone is, that's cool, but that's not really a story. If you really want to intertwine story with the game, I suggest you might want to look at the game, "Legend of the Five Rings" for ideas.

I don't know if this feedback helps any, but in case it does, let me give you a quick link to one of the more popular stories that helped bring the world of the legend of the five rings to life.

http://kazenoshiro.com/kazenoshiro/4/wife.php

To add on to this for Vercrius, and I'm just speaking here as a gamer and not the entire player base, I honestly don't believe it's in any game company's best interests to eschew story and intellectual property development on their titles.

I'm going to play through StarCraft II's campaign and then probably going to return to playing League of Legends. In terms of fiscal interest, I've spent just as much on League of Legends as the SCII Collector's Edition cost me.

I'd love to take this discussion to the General Discussion forum, Vercrius, so you can post the detriment of lore development in light of my -- and by the looks of this thread, many players' -- interest's effects on Riot's success.

To loop this back to the matter at hand: thanks for your efforts and this communication with us, Shawn. These replies, consideration of feedback, and the very work itself tells dorks like me that we're supporting a good bunch of guys.

While we're talking about constructive feedback, then... as a storyteller myself, I've always found 'relationships' to be the driving force in any strong narrative. Whether it's talking toys or space aliens or some ordinary guy who gets super powers or whatever- whatever the story- it's the relationships in that story that keep people invested.

As far as the imagery and construction, it was top notch. You have brought on some really spectacular writers and it shows. Work everyone there should be proud of. But the 'hook' for each of these will really be in the relationships. We have nothing invested in this hero coming in (most of us can't even pronounce his name), to have some other guy's shield (who we also haven't heard from) scar his face... that doesn't really cause a lot of drama for me. Not the best way to keep (or manufacture) interest.

For instance, hearing the backstory of Kayle and Morgana- since we already know both of them- is far more interesting. So I guess, if you really are looking for constructive feedback, keep these coming- but focus on the inner relationships of these heroes- and how they keep evolving... there are over 50 of them so you should have a large pallet to draw from.

Wonderful job, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I was slightly disappointed with the JoJ (though it was not bad by any means), but this was very well done. The name confused me too like others in this thread, I expected it to be some sort of rating system for the champions in order to get balancing feedback. I can't wait for more.

Bravo Riot, and as somebody who enjoys a good story and background information on the virtual world I'm spending my time in, I'm very happy to see you guys taking the lore seriously and fleshing it out more over time.

Great job Babagahnaghoosh (i dont know ur name cut me some slack). i found it really interesting, i play Xin Zhao very often and love the champion, i would like to see way more evaluations, but on top of that, i would LOVE to see how champions would interact with each other...like...what would happen if they crossed path sorta thing. at any rate, keep up the wonderful work RIOT people

CONCLUSION:

Xin is OP.

Definitely awesome! LoL has an interesting backstory. More Lore is always welcome.

he needs a Uber nerf....