[CENTER]Ravarj'Gorr, the Voidborn Hydra[/CENTER]

Added a section to explain Nest of Serpents AI.

Hello!

A quick review from a fellow contestant. For the first time in many MCCCs, I do have my own thread, so I'd appreciate you taking a look at that sometime. http://na.leagueoflegends.com/board/...ghlight=koelle

Passive: This is definitely core to the kit--I'm afraid that even though it scales with items/runes/etc, and thus should be fine late into the game, it may be a bit strong at a base level. With a little AD early, the heads could be hitting for 25 each, easily doubling your physical damage output, although they will only focus fire one target if they're alone, it appears. I'd consider toning the base damage down, but perhaps scaling it up to 20 base at later levels.

Q: This is a huge magic nuke for a fighter... but with that said, I like the ability overall. Good interaction with the passive ability.

W: Would it be possible to simplify the math on this, so it's easier to explain via tooltip and also in your concept? Perhaps a 15% (or more) damage boost per wave would suffice, and would be much clearer to the caster. If that boost were multiplicative, it would still have its current effect of later waves adding even more marginal damage.

E: With the 1-2-3-4-5 ratio on this ability, I feel it's plenty powerful at rank 5, but potentially a bit weak at low ranks. The healing on 5% of damage, in particular, would feel like it's barely even happening at rank 1 (probably healing you for only 1-2 per hit). I'd suggest bringing up the low ranks' power slightly, even if that means bringing the top ranks down a bit.

R: I am not a fan of built-in snowball effects in this game--at all. Many toxic/unworkable champions right now (and in the past) have built-in snowball effects, and so that's why I try to avoid it. This effect, however, would take well over 10 kills to accumulate on a team, so as far as snowball effects go it's fairly tame. Overall, this feels a lot like Feast but with a snowball effect built in. My preference would be to remove the passive snowballing and add something to the active, like a debuff with the same effect but for a short duration--and that duration could be doubled if the target is killed. This makes the ability more interactive and interesting, and gives some short-term survivability, which I think most fighters desire.

General: I'm not sure this champion would be played much like a fighter, given high AP ratios and nuking ability. In particular, I can see an assassin title fitting, since a QWR combo can theoretically deal 1220 (+~2.6AP) magic/true damage while the passive and E throw in some extra physical damage. Now, I do like that you've given abilities AP scaling rather than AD, as it only makes sense, and that does leave both builds open as options. I like the kit overall, and as always the calls are yours to make.

Lore: This is my weakest category, so I'll only offer things about which I'm certain. The first sentence in the second paragraph was long and somewhat confusing, so you may want to clean that up. Likewise, the second-last sentence in the second paragraph is a run-on and similarly a bit hard to cleanly read the first time.

Enjoy, and good luck!

A brief response:

Innate: I'll take a look at the damage, but the intention is for it to be his primary physical damage output. his base attack speed will be amongst the lowest, making a carry build less viable by reducing the return from investing in attack speed. His bonus attack speed per level and innate shall keep his damage output competititve, through.

Q: Yeah... if you manage to use it on a single isolated target the damage is pretty neat. Only softned by being dealt over a large spam of time (this lead to Ravarj'Gorr needing to stay alive for a while, rather than bursting you down). The existance of ways to prevent the full damage and the delay on it being the main reason i left it that high, through

W: i don't want to lose the stacking debuffs from extra pulses (slow and silence) - full damage is 4 times pulse damage plus the damage from every stack proc once (280 + 0.6 AP at level 5)

E: I had the same feeling about it, weak 1st and too strong 5th level.
Attack speed bonus changed from 25/50/75/100/125% to 40/55/70/85/100%
Healing on damage changed from 5/10/15/20/25% to 12/14/16/18/20%
This will make Jungle a lot solid for him. However, i believe his very weak gank will make up for it.

R: His built-in snowball is like cho'gath's feast snowball, but much harder to farm (and much stronger if capped). The point of the built-in snowball is to unease the enemies feelings, spread terror: "everytime he kills me he gets more stronger than me" (which is pretty similar to the common sense). This should lead to them fearing to face Ravarj'Gorr alone, but has little impact on a team. As a team, players would only concern about not allowing Ravarj'Gorr to go around unchecked (Just like Nasus) because the more he kills a teammate, the easier it gets for him to do it and get fed (and in no game you should allow an ally who's losing to an enemy to keep facing him alone). This is mostly for psychological play and can be used to bait Ravarj'Gorr to his death by a good team. Even pubs can achieve great counterplay to it - everyone already do it against a LeBlanc or Master Yi with the "Don't feed [champ]".
The activable is similar to feast with less damage and a 1 sec (or so) suppress on both Ravarj'Gorr and the target while the animation is played. (don't worry about Serpents attacking during it, they're also supressed, neither worry about using it during W, because you can't use anything while W is on - just like rammus Powerball/Defensive Curl)


with this finished i'll go to your thread now.

That looks good--I'm sure the passive will be kept in check. And I still like Q: it has a nice payoff if you catch someone alone (much like...well, a bunch of other abilities).

On W, I still think the damage ramp-up is confusing. Could it be a 15% (or higher, again) damage increase per stack, and with 3/4 stacks those effects still happen? I just think that would be much easier to explain in a tooltip as far as conveying the total damage the user should expect.

I like the E change--especially with regard to jungle sustain. It's a pseudo-burst lifesteal but the power looks appropriate.

R: Yeah, I'm just anti-snowball in general, so don't worry. I think it's implemented well here, without getting too out of control. At 20 stacks it has a powerful effect, but again the primary thing I'm concerned with is that there's little gameplay involved, and it's just a powerful but hidden passive effect. I do understand the active component more, and it sounds like a good difference from Feast.

One quick question: are the 4 waves of W cast over a 4 second duration? Or 3 seconds, with the first being instant?

Fascinating concept. I love the idea hope riot makes it.

On 1.5 seconds

at 0.0, 0.5, 1.0 and 1.5 intervals.

also, 3 stacks is the maximum (there is no 3/4)

If you hit with all pulses
1st pulse - does damage as 0 stacks, put a stack
2nd pulse - does damage as 1 stacks, put a stack
3rd pulse - does damage as 2 stacks, put a stack
4th pulse - does damage as 3 stacks, it could put a stack, but would be meaningless anyway.

also, the short duration is because it disable all your other spells and i didn't want to overextend a self-imposed "silence"

Oh right, I was thinking 3rd wave/4th wave, which is the 2nd/3rd stack. Yeah, that's all good.

Love this idea.

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