Originally Posted by Derix12321
Don't be mean, dude, at least offer some constructive criticism. I thought it was a great effort OP! You clearly put a lot of thought into this and I can appreciate that.
That being said I didn't really have a problem with the grammar or anything, but I personally think this initial outing was a little cheesy and stereotypical for my taste (the "new kid", the "stern teacher", the "pretty boy" and the "emo kid that doesn't really fit in"). Since this is just the first chapter, though, perhaps that can be remedied in future with future character development/interaction. Keep it up!! ;D
Edit 1: AWESOME JOB with the additions to Chapter 1!! I like how you are actually starting to incorporate their personalities and playstyles from LoL beyond the stereotypes of high school life (Excellent job with Cassiopeia and Draven in particular. I have a soft spot in my heart for Dunkmaster Jarvan, hope we see more of him). All around much improved from how the Chapter initially started.